It is nothing else
Just that you are not being yourself.
You are dismissive
You are distancing yourself,
Our words move you a lot;
Then why do you feign coldness?
Why can’t you just be you?
Our humor device
The place to vent out in distress,
Where are you going?
Someplace where you lost yourself?
Treading the paths you loathed.
Hate me, I just don’t care.
But refrain from hating yourself;
I indeed care for that.
I remember you in your typical stands
I considered you in you classy change
I saw you endure through wind and rain.
Now you try distancing yourself
Think you I won’t get a wisp,
You remember your thoughts dear?
The times when I mocked your dress?
Smiled at your funny crush?
And called you up on a hasty yen?
Having reduced your presence to a laugh,
You mock me to my depth…
Come back dear to the isolated pastures
The places you made terribly memorable
We miss you awfully often
Only if you knew that even!
26 comments:
beautiful dedication. hope ur friend takes the msg. god bless you both.
It's very personal. And, that's what makes it sweet.
However, there are quite a few grammatical mistakes and incorrect usages that might curb one's understanding. Bear that in mind. I recall writing that to you in the past.
Good luck!
Before I give you my opinion on your poem..I like the way the comments are presented on your blog.."3 dissected it" =D..
You can have the words slightly better framed, right?..but anyway, I liked the feeling carried out by the poem!..anger,sadness..all mixed into one.
Good work!
it was a lovely dedication...simple and straight from the heart..
thr is smthn for ya on my blog :)
wat font is this?
@ Sawan
I too hope.
Thanxx :)
@ Brosereview
ummm... can you please tell me exactly where? Thankxx for correcting me again. :)
Thankxxx :)
@ Crystal
Hey, thank you so mucch for visiting da. Glad that you like it, and I will try to improve.
Thanxx. :)
@ Kajal
Thanxx :)
@ Mayz
Hey thankxx for those. :)
@ John
Poor Richard.
Thanxx :)
Nice poetry kiddo:)
Hope your friend gets the message!
Keep Writing!
@ Akanksha
Thankxx, I too hope he does. :)
Thanxx for visiting and commenting, and welcome to my blog. :)
Do keep visiting. :)
very nice and very sweet...a few grammatical errors (sorry for pointing it out :) ) but they are acceptable considering the purity of the message you want to send across :) a very touching post :)
I can feel your frustration and desire.
give him a kick on his rear side.. he will be alright.. if he is emotionally down, let him alone for sometime..
beautiful poem!
I hope ur friend comes back to his cheerful self again soon. Sometimes it happens with all of us...we lose our funny bone or happyness or whatever...but time heals.
TC
Keshi.
beautiful post for ur friend ..:)...it was nicely worded :)..
urs..hemu..
ur post reminded me of these lines 4m an old Sonu song
"Mujhse naraaz ho to ho jao
Khud se lekin khafa khafa na raho
Mujhko tum bhool jao to jao
Aap apne se par juda na raho"Hope ur friend gets back to normal soon:)
@ Abhik
Thankxx dude, nd I would like to know the errors :)
Thankxx once again. :)
@ Walker
Thanxx :)
@ Chriz
Hey, Thankxx for the suggestion, he he, That was a nice one :P
But he z a bit senior to me, and kicking will pose a prob :(
Thankxx :)
@ keshi
Hope ur all right :)
Thankxx :)
@ Hemu
Thankxx dude :)
@ Comfortably numb
Hey, welcome to my blog and thankxx for visiting and commenting :)
Hope he does, and those were beautiful lines. :)
Thankxx :)
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